Thoughts for a Rewrite

My first semester at the University brought about the play "The Drowning Dance." A romantic comedy with dark undertones. It didn't really work. And my rewrites that followed didn't work. In fact, I believe they destroyed the play. BUT a couple of months ago, after going to a bar to meet some old friends from undergrad, I have some new thoughts to rewrite this problematic play and turn it into something really funny and great. Some of these won't make sense out of context, but I need to document them.

Dan Allen (an old aquaintance from undergrad. Prone to parties, nakedness, and not editing things he says) = Clark/Peter
Clark lives with his mother.
Peter sells precious moments figures to allow him time to paint.

Peter: "If I have a daughter I'd want her to be, well, first off, she'd have to be a lesbian, and two, she'd have to be fat. Really fat, like, only wearing muu muus or a parka."

Peter: "My game is no game. I go up to a woman and say, 'Hey, I'm terrible in bed, I'm hung like a birthmark, and I'm only gonna last as long as a bull rider, 8 seconds, when are we going to your place?"

Peter: "I'm highly skilled at two things: Cubs trivia and going down on a woman. I am so good, and I mean no disrespect by this, but I'm so good, I could probably teach you a thing or two."

Fat, old swingers in a bar? How does this come up?

Peter/Jody's sister were engaged in college

Clark: "Sure, I live with my mother, but the guy sells precious moments figures, come on!"

Clark dates a high school girl?